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the diagram below shows the process for producing bottled and canned carbonate drinks

the diagram below shows the process for producing bottled and canned carbonate drinks
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The process illustrated above details how row
water
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cleaned
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is cleaned
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 in order to
filtering
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filter
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water
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, which
packing
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is packed
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 and delivered to supermarkets.
Overall
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,
process
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the process
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 involves 5 main stages, beginning with
water
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 cleaning and
final
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finally
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 with packaging.
To begin
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, the raw
water
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filtered
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is filtered
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 and softened with chemicals in
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water
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the water
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 cleaning part of
factory
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the factory
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.
Then
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 through
pump
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the pump
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water
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leak
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leaked
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 to electric heaters, where
water
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 is boiled and following through
cooling
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a cooling
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 pipe is cooled to the desired temperature and added carbon dioxide. After, carbonated
water
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stream
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streamed
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 to
mixing
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the mixing
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 tank, where to liquid added
coloring
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colouring
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, syrup and flavour. In stage 4 soda filling to bottles and cans.
Finally
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, bottles and cans
packed
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are packed
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 and delivered to supermarkets.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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