The diagram below shows the process of producing smoked fish
The diagram illustrates how to produce smoked
fish
.
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Overall
, it can be seen that in diagrams have 13 steps, it begins with catching Linking Words
fish
in the ocean to delivering it to the Use synonyms
fish
store.
The first stage is catching Use synonyms
fish
before they have been transported to a port. Use synonyms
Afterwards
it has been frozen in equipment. Add a comma
Afterwards,
After
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this
step, the frozen Linking Words
fish
thawed into fresh water and cut open. The next stage is that Use synonyms
fish
is put into salt adding yellow colouring and it becomes smoked. Use synonyms
After
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this
the smoked Add a comma
this,
fish
was placed into boxes, before freezing at 0 degrees. After keeping Use synonyms
fish
in a cold store, it is distributed into trucks. The Use synonyms
last
stage is Linking Words
the
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when the
fish
is delivered to the Use synonyms
fish
store.Use synonyms
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