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Some people believe that parents should teach children how to be good members of society while others say it should be taught by school . Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Majority of people think that children should learn how to be good members of society from their
parents
otherwise
 the other believe place of learning it is at
school
. If we take about the family role and that time ,we say :children should be communication with
parents
 during so many times,play with learning games together
then
 the most important and first steps ,learn some communication skills with
parents
 together every day.They want to repeat with mother (dad) words and some things. In my opinion ,
school
 is so important part ,how did they learn so many rules? And I think we mustn’t say family is important but
school
 isn’t necessary. In order to the children was spending so long time with friends and other
teacher
 together in the
school
 . We must take into consideration
teacher
 should be mum(dad) in the future. They
teacher
 must study just teaching skills and some exercise and already they must learn us how do you behaviour your
teacher
 ,friends ,family or environment?
Such
 as
that is
 main reason they have been learning a lot of life’s rules about living and non-living world i
thing
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think
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 not only
parents
 but
also
teacher
 should be teach us how do we correct people in the world
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You have attempted to discuss both views and have also provided your own opinion, which is good.
task achievement
You show an understanding of the importance of both parents and schools in a child's development.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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