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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Sumarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparasions where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Sumarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparasions where relevant.
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Contained in the illustrations is information pertaining to the proportion of British citizens from different age groups who
make
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 donations to charity between 1990 and 2010. From an observational perspective, late adulthood and retired adults witnessed an upward trend
while
 the opposite trend was true for the others.
Additionally
, the young adults group have the least
donators
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donors
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 of all. Looking at the graph in
further
 detail, the 51-65 community stood at exactly 35% in 1990 before increasing slightly to nearly 40%.
Similarly
, there is a gradual rise in the 65+ crowd from around 33% to 35% during the same timeline. Turning to the remaining age ranges, both the 18-25 and 26-35 donators rate dropped considerably, from 17% and 31% to 6% and 24% respectively.
The
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 similar pattern can be seen in the
middle stage
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 class, it used to
dominated
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 other categories with 42% but declined by 7% in the next 20 years.
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