More and more families have computers in their homes. What advantages and disadvantages do home computers have for children? Should parents restrict the amount of time their children spend using the computer?

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own electronic item like
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. Having a
computer
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lots of advantages
like
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,
a children
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children
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can easily access
the
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knowledge about
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through Artificial Intelligence (AI).
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that numerous
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also
misuse
of
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the computer
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computer
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by playing games and chatting. In
this
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will examine the benefits and drawbacks of using
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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and provide
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eligibal
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logical
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conclusion. Nowadays, having a
computer
is very common in every household. Many parents purchase a
computer
so their
child
can access new technology and be updated about current
situation
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around the world and with that their
childrens
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children
children's
and learn new
things
. In today's
generation
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several teenagers are engaged in learning about (AI) which can benefit them
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future
and will kept updated.
For example
, in recent
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one
new
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came
infront
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in front
of
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that a woman was visiting every doctor to
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a
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good treatment
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his
child
but the astonishing thing was that no doctor was able to detect which kind of problem her
child
was going through, but when that woman wrote the
things
which her
child
was going through AI detected the problem
also
provide a solution even the shocking thing was that her
child
become fit after a month. AI has made every
childrens
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child's
life uncomplicated with the help of (AI) they can learn
things
easily,
futhermore
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furthermore
, AI has given them
opportunity
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to complete their homework, college
assigments
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assignments
and many more
things
without any difficulties.
In addition
, there are
also
some other
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of children who
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choosen
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chosen
to misuse new technology. Their parent
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them a
computer
so with that they can gain new knowledge
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instead
of that they prefer
of
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play games with their friends
also
they are busy
in
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chatting whole which has ruined their routine
also
they are scoring low in exams. In conclusion, in today's
era
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many people own a
computer
in their house, numerous
student
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use
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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to gain knowledge and be updated with the current
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scenario
senior
,
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few of the student
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the technology by being active in games and chatting.
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