Write about the following topic: Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
The vast majority of
population
thinks that Add an article
the population
workforce
of specific professions ,Correct article usage
the workforce
such
as medical workers and engineers supposed to build their career in the exact place where they had training for this
. While
,
the rest of the Remove the comma
apply
of the
majority defends the idea of Remove the redundancy
apply
acess
of freedom of work in Correct your spelling
access
other place
can be Change the wording
another place
other places
choosen
by the professionals as they wish.Correct your spelling
chosen
This
essay agrees with the second statement. I believe that free choice of placement for workforce
helps people to expand their practical skills and Correct article usage
the workforce
also
proides
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provides
benefit
for Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
countries
to stabilise their target employability status.
Professional guide of the practical and technical skilled workers more open to absorb
new impacts of cultures and implement it rightly. Through the immigration process Wrong verb form
absorbing
of
the engineers and the doctors Change preposition
apply
did
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apply
exchanges
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exchanged
on
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apply
knowledge based
practices Add a hyphen
knowledge-based
and
gradually turned into Correct word choice
apply
worldwide
phenomenon. Add an article
a worldwide
While
looking back at the time one can observe the accuracy in similarity
of Add an article
the similarity
a similarity
east
and west Capitalize word
East
european
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European
countries
architecture over the years. Surprisingly, some Change noun form
countries'
country's
asian
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Asian
countries
manage to build same
structures thanks to the replacement of Correct article usage
the same
the
professionals.
Most Correct article usage
apply
countries
provide internal and external transferring system
of people with specific skills and put Fix the agreement mistake
systems
large
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a large
sum
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sums
on
projects to provide better quality Change preposition
into
on
their society so that they can prevent Change preposition
in
need based
Add a hyphen
need-based
criseses
. In order to show their support Correct your spelling
crises
countries
offer different benefits for employees and employers while
making visa processing easier. For example
, Germany prevents
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prevented
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a decline
decline
in Correct article usage
a decline
skillful
workers with specific job Change the spelling
skilful
Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
qualification
for Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
indian
students who studied medical science or engineering. Government Change the capitalization
Indian
heelps
them Correct your spelling
helps
while
reducing accomodational
and Correct your spelling
accommodation
accommodations
income related
taxes for 10 years Add a hyphen
income-related
,
so that they can build Remove the comma
apply
stable
life in Add an article
a stable
new
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the new
contry
.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
country
freedom
of relocation of specific professionals implements in variety of knowledge with Correct article usage
the freedom
transferabble
practicality, Correct your spelling
transferable
transferrable
on the other
hand
it helps to balance Add the comma(s)
hand,
populational
downfall of Correct article usage
the populational
workforce
.Add an article
the workforce
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task response
You have addressed both views of the topic and provided your own opinion clearly.
content
The essay contains some valid points and ideas, especially regarding the benefits of allowing professionals to work in different countries.
Fully explain your ideas
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