Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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in the contemporary era, selling exotic goods
are
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more
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common
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produced
ones
.
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essay elaborates
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well
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whether
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beneficial or not.
to begin
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the
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unique culture and agricultural situation.
this
notion leads to
manufacture
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of a magnificent good, exceptional to a region.
therefore
, the great
tendancy
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tendency
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the
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society to acquire the
best produced
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version of a product demands relying on importing local goods
of
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a foreign country to their own in order to meet the high expectancy of the community, which stands as the first
reasons
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reason
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for switching from local to exotic
ones
.
moreover
, the harsh or unsuitable climate type of a region may deprive the
people
of manufacturing the respective
good
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goods
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. to illustrate,
while
Iran has the greatest fertile fields for producing rice, it doesn't have the
suitale
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suitable
ones
for
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to grow.
consequently
, the substantial reliance of societies on foreign products may stem from the fact that they may be of higher
quality
in
another
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ones
in addition
to not being able to
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in their
erea
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area
. Notably,
majority
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of
people
and I consider
this
notion a positive improvement since not only it provides
people
with a vast diversity of commodities, but
also
better
quality
.
in other words
,
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importing other
range
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ranges
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of merchandise gives
people
the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
to go
further
their traditional
ones
,
explore
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and explore
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foreign cultures;
therefore
, fostering the knowledge of other cultural practices.
moreover
, the imported
ones
may be
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maybe
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even better in
quality
,
wether
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its
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because of the production process or
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the economical
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economical
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situation.
to
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cite an example, the importation of fabrics from
turkey
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to Iran is so beneficial for
people
because
turkey
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is the most sophisticated producer in
this
field.
to conclude
,
importation
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the importation
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of different
commdities
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commodities
communities
is witnessing a surge globally.
however
,
this
is extremely efficient for
people
since it
bring
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a
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greater diversity and
quality
as well.
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