The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making progress, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making progress, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The illustrations indicate the phases and tools used in the
process
of making
cement
, and the stages of using
cement
to manufacture concrete for building goals.
Overall
, the production of
cement
is a
five stage
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, man-made, linear
process
. It begins with turning a combination of limestone and clay as raw materials into powder and results in,
cement
, being packed in bags. In concrete production,
cement
, water, sand and
grave
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as four raw ingredients with specific proportions, in a
two stage
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, man-made
process
,
are
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and are
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poured into
concrete
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the concrete
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mixer. First of all, in order to
making
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cement
, a mixture of clay and limestone is converted to powder, using
crusher
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a crusher
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, and
then
, that goes into a mixer. Following that, it gets affected by an external heat in a rotating heater and
subsequently
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the product is put on a grinder and at
last
, the final product, which is the
cement
, is packed into bags. In the
process
of making concrete, four raw ingredients,
named
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,
cement
, water, sand and small stones,
also
known as gravel, are poured into a concrete mixer by following proportions respectively, 15%, 10%, 25% and 50%.
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