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The diagram gives information preparation process of frozen fish pies.

The diagram gives information preparation process of frozen fish pies.
The diagram gives information preparation process of frozen
fish
Use synonyms
 pies. The ingredients
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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use
Wrong verb form
used
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 for
fish
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 pie are fresh salmon, beans, a little sauce and
potatoes
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 chopped circle.
Potatoes
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 delivered up to 1 month are first cleaned,
then
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 the peeled
potatoes
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 are sliced and sent to boiled. After chilling the
potatoes
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 are prepared with sauce and beans Fresh salmon, delivered
less
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in less
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 than 12 hours, is marined with lemon juice and salt and sent to
steam
Correct article usage
a steam
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 oven.
Then
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 after it is removed skin and bones with waste disposals before
sending
Wrong verb form
sent
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to
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for
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inspect
Replace the word
inspection
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. For preparation sliced
potatoes
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 and prepared beans are covered with
addition
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additional
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 sauce to salmon. The
fish
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 pies are wrapped and
then
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 frozen. At
this
Linking Words
point
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point,
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 they are ready for dispatch and may be stored at the factory. So
fish
Use synonyms
pies
Fix the agreement mistake
pie
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 lovers can buy
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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 from
store
Add an article
the store
a store
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 and easily prepare and eat
it
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them
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 at home just by heating
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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 in
the
Correct article usage
a
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 microwaveable container.

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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, potatoes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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