The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information pertaining to how many
time
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times
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people who do not have work in
UK
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the UK
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got in one year ago. The data is shown in
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
, the
time
unemployed spent in the morning is greater than in the
afternoon
. The highest is morning
women
in
housework
, the shortest is
afternoon
women
at
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staying in bed and playing
sport
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sports
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. First and foremost, in the morning
women
spent mostly half a day
for
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housework
.
Then
they got
time
for shopping,
job
hunting and visiting
friends
or
relatives
from 26% to 10%. They
also
spent on gardening,
tv
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, reading, decorating, walking, sitting around, staying in bed, visiting
town
, playing
sport
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sports
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,
drinking
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and drinking
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around 1% to 8%. With morning men, they put in
housework
, shopping,
job
hunting,
gardening
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and gardening
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more than other work between 14% and 22%. After that, they spent for visiting
friends
or
relatives
,
tv
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TV
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, reading, decorating, walking, sitting around, staying
bed
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in bed
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, visiting
town
, playing
sport
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sports
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,
drinking
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and drinking
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since
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2% to 9%. Moving on
to
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, in the
afternoon
men
got
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time
at
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for
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housework
, shopping,
job
hunting, visiting
friends
or
relatives
, gardening,
tv
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TV
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, reading, decorating,
walking
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and walking
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, nothing around 7% to 14%.
Next,
they spent
for
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staying
bed
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in bed
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, visiting
town
, playing
sport
, drinking from 1% to 4%. After,
afternoon
women
put in
housework
, shopping,
job
hunting, visiting
friends
or
relatives
,
tv
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TV
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,
reading
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and reading
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between 10% and 21%.
Finally
, they spent
for
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on
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gardening, decorating, walking, sitting around, staying
bed
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in bed
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, visiting
town
, playing
sport
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sports
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,
drinking
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and drinking
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from 0% to 6%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon, women, housework, sport, job, friends, relatives, tv, town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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