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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the oil use in four main areas of the world, including the United
States
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, China, Western
Europe-Japan
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Europe
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, and the Middle East, between 2009 and 2030.
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, total consumption reached its peak in 2009 and continued until 2015, with the United
States
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 being the biggest consumer. The steepest decline
of
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 oil use happened after 2015 for the United
States
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, and it is predicted to gradually decrease until the
last
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 period. The data for the rest of the areas was fluctuating, and it will be the same in the future. Based on the statistics, the United
States
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 consumed about ten million
barrels
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 a day for six years in a row, starting from the beginning of the period to 2015.
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 expenditure
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 gradually declined.
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, it is projected to reach 4 million
barrels
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 per day in 2030.
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, China and the Middle East only consumed 2 million
barrels
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,
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 Western
Europe-Japan
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Europe
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 used
a
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double
amount
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 at 4 in 2015. The rate of the Middle East and China slightly increased from time to time, and it is predicted to stick at no more than 4
barrels
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at the end
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 of the interval. Notwithstanding, the rate of Western Europe and Japan's
consumptions
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consumption
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 gently decreased, and it is forecasted to be the lowest in 2030.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words states, barrels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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