Some people think that all unviersity students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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the
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job opportunities.
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college
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to pick the course subjects that they want,
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science and technology subjects should
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while
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it will
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provided positive impact
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their future.
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my
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both of the ideas
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a
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benefit and might
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fit in some situations.
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will enable
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creativity and good performance for the
student
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, most of the
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of the
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when they do the specific task or study that they like which
lead
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to improvement on the work in the future.
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, when I was young, I
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so I
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the
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major that
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to
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that
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me to perform better
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my
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and future work.
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, good performance could
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happen when we like the specific job rather than perform the job
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pressure
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.
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a lot of
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studying major science and technology because these
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possible
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help them back after their career path in
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of personal benefits and social economic development. As we have seen,
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students
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that
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studied these two main majors, mostly
they
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got high compensation and
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of opportunities which possible to help
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on
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the
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economic
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. Meanwhile, these majors
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enable the local
student
to work abroad
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income
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their country. In conclusion, I do believe that both choices of choosing the subject that they want to study
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their
colleages
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colleagues
colleges
and choosing only the potential majors
such
as science and technology provided the same benefit to
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society and themself but that should
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more clearly for each personal decision for the major that they want to
purpue
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pursue
purple
in the university because it could possible give versatile impact both negative and
possitive
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positive
impact based on an individual decision.
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grammar
Work on grammatical accuracy and punctuation to avoid basic errors which can sometimes impede understanding. e.g., 'unviersity' should be 'university', 'colleage' should be 'college', and should be consistent in the use of singular or plural forms.
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content
The essay provides a balanced discussion by considering both viewpoints.
summary
The conclusion effectively summarizes the discussion and presents the writer's personal opinion clearly.

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