The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day

The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day
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the diagrams present the modifications that have taken place in the health centre between the year 2005 and the present.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the health centre is enlarged and redesigned.
Moreover
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, parking lots are expanded
while
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the garden area is reduced.
To begin
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with, Physiotherapy and office remained in the same position but their size was shrunk. A C3 room was demolished and the entrance was moved from the bottom of the facility to the left side,
as well as
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, a reception desk which was relocated to the left corner.
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, children's play areas were
also
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added near the reception desk and the door. The old CR1 and CR2 rooms were changed into CR4 and CR3,
besides
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, the old entrance area became the rooms for CR1 and CR2. The new minor operations room was constructed on the top left corner of the building.
Additionally
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, the seats inside the care centre were rearranged
while
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both old fences which located
in
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the bottom left and right were repositioned. The number of cars which can park in the car
parking
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increased by 18.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cr with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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