Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these method are ineffective, and at worst that may be dangerous. To what extent did you agree with this statement.
Today, the development of other shapes of
treatment
had been increased which is most of those causing hazardous and unsuccessful effects. In fact, I strongly agreed that people
should avoid the alternative
shapes of treatment
for two main reasons.
Firstly
, many alternatives therapy executant
are not certificated by government. We know that government only make a professional of health to people
who already finish some exams or course related to health. To illustrate, when we go to the alternative
treatment
, sometimes the executant
will give advice
that not same with the professionals . Not only those advice
make people
confussed, but it also
sometimes that can be pointed not to the people
sickness, moreover
it can make people
condition to be more painful than before when they doing that advice
. Therefore
, advice
from executant
of alternative
treatments should clarified firsst from professionals to make it believed.
Secondly
, when we go to the alternative
treatment
, the executant
will give medicine
or drugs which are not in certain dose. Although
that might cheaper than the official, those can bring a negative impact. If the medicine
not in certain dose, people
will go down more time to rest. To illustrate, when children given high dose of medicine
, it can be a harmful to them. Therefore
, medicine
from alternatives should be identified first before people
going to buy that which is needed some money to do that.
In conclusion, some alternative
treatments might have a executor that not having a certificate from government, although
that cheaper than official treatment
. I, therefore
, remain firmly convinced that people
should not going to alternative
treatments when they are unwell.Submitted by alfathemaster on
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