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In the past peope used to travel abroad to look for many differences from their home country. Nowadays, cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar What are the reasons? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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People
 could go overseas in order to get information about a handful of differences between their countries. These days, almost every city has the same appearance. There are several reasons for
this
 trend. The first is that in order to draw
people
's attention,
while
 the second is that average
cities
, in terms of development, are copying the construction of urban areas from modern
cities
, and
this
 has more advantages than disadvantages. On the one hand, these days, in the past,
people
 who went abroad in order to look for a myriad of picturesque buildings since there were no
such
 places in their country,
it
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would give rise to the possibility that the government or country might lose a number of
people
.
For example
,
people
 in the USA tend to stay in their places for travel or other reasons.
Furthermore
, some
cities
 copy the modern appearance of urban areas to grab the attention of visitors with a new  and comfortable atmosphere.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of advantages, even though all of the developed
cities
 are so similar. Formerly, if
people
 in the average class could not afford to travel to well-known
cities
, they were given opportunities to feel as these emotions in their own
cities
.
Hence
, in developed
cities
,
people
 consist of almost all over the world, so there are many kinds of religions and traditions
as well as
 customs that can make the
cities
 similar.  In conclusion, there are all the concepts  and reasons given. All of these can give rise to the fact that I think
advantages
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the advantages
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 may outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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