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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of
healthcare
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 spending to GDP in several European nations for three periods, which are 2002, 2007, and 2012.
Overall
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,
Switzerland
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 allocates its
healthcare
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 budget higher than any
countries
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country
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 in Europe for the given periods. Meanwhile, Estonia has the
least
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lowest
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 spending proportion on health. In detail, there are four countries with fixed health expenditure budgetary. These states are
Switzerland
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, Belgium, Spain, and Estonia. Both
Switzerland
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 and Belgium have taken their place to be the top two of the highest
healthcare
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 expenditure,
accounted
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 for 11% and 10% of GDP, respectively.
On the other hand
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, Estonia has taken the
last
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 rank, which recorded at 3%.
In addition
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,
the
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other countries have different patterns of
heath
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health
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 spending.
For example
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, the
healthcare
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 expenditure in France was the highest in 2007
along with
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Switzerland
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. Meanwhile, another country like Norway experienced a decrease
of
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in
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healthcare
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 spending. It reached its peak in 2002 and gradually declined in both five and ten years later.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words healthcare, switzerland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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