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The graph shows average temperatures in Paris, Dubai and Sydney

The graph shows average temperatures in Paris, Dubai and Sydney
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The graph presents temperature data in
Paris
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,
Dubai
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, and Sydney.
Overall
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, the temperature in
Dubai
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 increased more quickly than in other cities.
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 the weather in
Paris
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 seemed to follow the same pace
with
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Dubai
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but
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it rose more
slower
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slowly
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.
However
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, The trend in Sydney shows the opposite trend by declining at the beginning and
overlpaped
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overlapped
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Dubai
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 figure at the start of December. At the beginning of the year, Sydney started with the highest degree reaching almost 25 and declined gradually to hit the lowest point at 13, before from
july
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July
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 to
december
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December
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pick at
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on
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the
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contrast,
Dubai
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 and
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Paris
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Paris's
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 temperatures went up from
january
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January
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 to
august
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August
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.
Dubai
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 reached the highest degree at 36 and decreased sharply to 22.
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, the number in
Paris
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levell
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levelled
 off at 20 from July to
august
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August
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 and went down exponentially to 5 in December.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paris, dubai with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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