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Writing Samples
Band 3

The bar graph below shows the consumption of natural gas world wide from 1950 to 1990.

The bar graph below shows the consumption of natural gas world wide from 1950 to 1990.
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This
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 shows
this
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 bar chart
wich
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which
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link
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 between the
Energy
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 utilization and 1998 to 2002 years.
Its
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 clear from the graph that Petrolium
have
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highest
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the highest
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 number
than
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of
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 other sources.
Acording
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According
 to what is shown, Coal consumption
had
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increas
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increased
 in 2002 more than year 1998. In
addtion
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addition
, Natural gas had just over the
the
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consumption
over
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in
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 1998. By 2002 the
Petrolium
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Petroleum
 and Nuclear electric
poower
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power
energy
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 went up more than
year
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the year
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 1998.
While
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,
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 Renewable
Energy
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has drop
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 in 2002.
At
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To
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 sum up, we could say that the
petrolium
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petroleum
 is the major source of
the
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energy
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.
While
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,
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 Renewable
energy
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is have
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 less demand than other sources.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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