The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people believe that in the upcoming years,

humans

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physical condition should worsen than the present situation. I strongly agree with

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statement; the usage of junk foods and a lack of exercise would lead them to reduce their health.

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of the sexes like to eat food from outside

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cooking at home, the food's taste & presentation attracts them to use more hotel foods. But the

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good health.

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utilities may lead

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individuals into

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chronic diseases

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, Boys and girls love to eat chilli

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trucks but the content which

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more taste is Ajenomoto,

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adding

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chemical

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activities

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as running, walking and

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from their

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busy world people

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behind other objects which make them happy. They forgot about the feeling that can create from better movements,

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diseases

like heart attacks and

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patients are increasing

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due to

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lack of exercise.

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study done by

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Dublin

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in 2023,

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people with

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age limit of 40-45

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died

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cardiac arrest because of

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workouts. In conclusion, human beings can improve their life span by consuming quality

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supplements

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gyms for workouts.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

1. Standard of health
2. Average
3. Lower
4. Future
5. Aging population
6. Chronic diseases
7. Sedentary lifestyle
8. Lack of exercise
9. Poor dietary habits
10. Environmental pollution
11. Technological advancements
12. Impact on health

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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town . What are the advantages and disadvantages of this ?

Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages.If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and if so, how?

In some countries, an increasing number of children are overweight or obese as a result of eating too much fast food. Banning fast food from school canteens is the best way to fight this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that teenagers should study all school subjects. Others argue that they should focus on only the subjects that they are good at or find most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.