It is often said that we should work to live, not live to work. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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for quite some time, I have been very busy. It is amazing that you can cook Indian food now! The most preferred national cuisine for me is Vietnamese food. I love Vietnamese food because it has a

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of dishes. My favourite dishes are shrimp in a batter, beef stir-fry and chocolate fondant. I am not really good at cooking, but I can cook some pasta and rice. You mentioned that you are planning to go to a cooking camp. Where will it take place? For how long are you planning to go? What kind of activities are you going to do at the camp? I have to go, I need to finish my homework. Write me back. Best wishes, Nikolai

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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