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It is often said that we should work to live, not live to work. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Dear Mary, I’m very glad that you wrote me an email. Sorry for not writing
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 for quite some time, I have been very busy. It is amazing that you can cook Indian food now! The most preferred national cuisine for me is Vietnamese food. I love Vietnamese food because it has a
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 of dishes. My favourite dishes are shrimp in a batter, beef stir-fry and chocolate fondant. I am not really good at cooking, but I can cook some pasta and rice. You mentioned that you are planning to go to a cooking camp. Where will it take place? For how long are you planning to go? What kind of activities are you going to do at the camp? I have to go, I need to finish my homework. Write me back. Best wishes, Nikolai
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • financial stability
  • personal development
  • career advancement
  • fulfillment
  • leisure
  • self-care
  • burnout
  • stress
  • setting boundaries
  • professional success
  • personal satisfaction
  • harmonious balance
  • purpose and structure
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