The pie charts below show the propotions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit.

The pie charts below show the propotions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit.
The pie charts below illustrate the number of people who
traveled
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in
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Ireland
last
year by age group, and by gender and type of visit.
It is clear that
the majority are adults from 25 to 54 years of age,
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and most
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are men.
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the overwhelming majority of those who visit the state are adults at least
twenty three
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per
cent
in one year in comparison with the average who is not
twenty five
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. The figures were 19 per
cent
and eleven
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respectively.
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groups of ages are similar, they are 66 years and over second is 16-24 years with nine per
cent
. Meanwhile, in the second chart males with leisure visits remained
forty three
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per
cent
and females forty per
cent
. More visits to the country just for vacation than business trips. Total per
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of business
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17%, women it is 4%, the remaining 13% in men and in men in both situations the degree is higher
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