The pie charts below show the propotions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit.
The pie charts below illustrate the number of people who
traveled
Change the spelling
travelled
in
Ireland Change preposition
to
last
year by age group, and by gender and type of visit.
It is clear that
the majority are adults from 25 to 54 years of age, most
are men. Correct word choice
and most
For
example
the overwhelming majority of those who visit the state are adults at least Add a comma
example,
twenty three
per Add a hyphen
twenty-three
cent
in one year in comparison with the average who is not twenty five
. The figures were 19 per Add a hyphen
twenty-five
cent
and eleven percent
respectively. Change the spelling
per cent
Furthermore
, two
groups of ages are similar, they are 66 years and over second is 16-24 years with nine per Correct article usage
the two
cent
.
Meanwhile, in the second chart males with leisure visits remained forty three
per Add a hyphen
forty-three
cent
and females forty per cent
. More visits to the country just for vacation than business trips.
Total per cent
of business visit
17%, women it is 4%, the remaining 13% in men and in men in both situations the degree is higherCorrect subject-verb agreement
visits
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