The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.

The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.
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The above bars demonstrate the amount of car trips divided by purpose and gender in 2015 and we are going to summarize the information that was included in
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chart. As was predictable, the highest percentage of car
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is for work, and men at about 52
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and women at 39
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are making the bars high. On the second place, shopping has been one of the more intentions of vehicle
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case, ladies will beat males by more than two times higher rate(18 vs 10
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). In other terms of automobile
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, we have courses, visiting towns, banks, running errands, and recreations that barely could catch 10
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and even more than two-thirds of them did not even touch 5 %. In conclusion, based on the bar data, the more important benefit of personal vehicle
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is work, whether it is by car or just for transportation.
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