IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Some people think that e-books are the death of paper books, while others think that paper books will never disappear. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #e-books #death #paper #books
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In recent years, many people believe that electronic
books
Use synonyms
 are
one
Use synonyms
 step ahead
than
Change preposition
of
show examples
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
. I partially agree with
this
Linking Words
 point of view since the advantages of
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 cannot be overlooked either. There are many great aspects that surround
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
.
Firstly
Linking Words
, it is
convinient
Correct your spelling
convenient
 to use.
E-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 are portable and lightweight, making
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
show examples
 easy to carry around
instead
Linking Words
 of carrying multiple bulky
books
Use synonyms
.
Secondly
Linking Words
,
one
Use synonyms
 e-book reader can hold thousands of
books
Use synonyms
. It saves a lot of space in bookshelves or in bags.
One
Use synonyms
 does not have to worry about the storage limit.
Besides
Linking Words
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 cost much less than
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
. Because there is not much
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
pre-production involved like that in printed
books
Use synonyms
. No paperback covers, no packaging,
no
Correct word choice
and no
show examples
 shipping. So eventually, it becomes much cheaper than printed ones.
However
Linking Words
,
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 provide undeniable opportunities to readers.
One
Use synonyms
 of the important
thing
Change to a plural noun
things
show examples
 is that there is no risk of getting distracted. In many cases, when
books
Use synonyms
 are read on a device,
notisfactions
Correct your spelling
notifications
 from other apps and phone calls distract the reader. Reading
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
show examples
 a person to focus on what they are reading about. Including
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
aid
Correct subject-verb agreement
aids
show examples
 a person sleep better. The engagement and brain activity that comes with reading printed
books
Use synonyms
 can help a person
drifts
Correct subject-verb agreement
drift
show examples
 off. Another great aspect of reading
book
Correct article usage
a book
show examples
 is that
reader
Correct article usage
the reader
show examples
 can mark notes of ideas which are original. It helps to remember the information which is necessary and find it quickly. In conclusion, readers support both
e-
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
 and
paper
Use synonyms
books
Use synonyms
. In my
opinion
Add a comma
opinion,
show examples
 it is more important to use them at the right time.
Submitted by omondavlat91 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Introduce transitions between ideas more clearly to enhance flow between paragraphs.
task achievement
Ensure precise vocabulary and correct minor spelling errors like "notisfactions" should be 'notifications'.
coherence cohesion
Clarify the conclusion by summing up your arguments more distinctly to make a stronger impact.
task achievement
The essay provides a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument.
supported main points
The main points are well addressed, with adequate support for both e-books and paper books.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Adjustable font sizes
  • Built-in dictionaries
  • Environmentally friendly
  • Durability
  • Accessibility
  • Visual impairments
  • Tactile sensation
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Nostalgic value
  • Disconnect
  • Digital screens
  • Reading habits
  • Attentively
  • Retain information
  • Social and cultural experience
  • Economic disparities
What to do next:
Look at other essays: