The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.

The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.
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What has been depicted in the line chart is the
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of expenditure by visitors from five different countries to New Zealand in separate years, 1996 and 2014.
Overall
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, the
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of expenditure in Australia ranked
first,
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whereas
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that of China stood at the
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in the
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allocated.
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, despite an upward trend in most countries over the given period, Japan remained unchanged. The
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of money paid by Australia in the first decade gradually increased, starting at 1000 and finishing at 2500, which was the highest value among other nations. In the next 8 years, it moderately decreased, reaching 2000 in 2014, followed by the USA
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at almost 800, and in 2010 it had the highest portion (1700), witnessing an approximately 500 reduction
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of the period.
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, by 2004, China had minimally risen in expenditure (500), reaching its peak. In the following 10 years, it slowly declined. Both Japan and the United Kingdom had the same exact number as in the beginning, which was just below 500. Both of them followed an opposite pattern to each other from 1996 to 2006, reaching around 800 in 2007.
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, the UK continued to rise and stood at nearly 1200
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,
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Japan dropped slightly and reached 600 in 2014.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual expenditure
  • tourism revenue
  • spending trends
  • economic impact
  • visitor spend
  • tourism sector
  • peak spending
  • fluctuations
  • incline/decline in spending
  • monetary contribution
  • tourist demographics
  • economic conditions
  • tourism campaigns
  • statistical analysis
  • data interpretation
  • fiscal year
  • extrapolate data
  • spending patterns
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