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the table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The world has a huge
population
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 of over 7
billion
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 humans on Earth. But each country has a different
population
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. If each human lived inside
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one country, the Earth would barely have any space at all. The top three countries with the highest
population
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 on Earth are
China
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,
India
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 and
USA
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. These continents have the highest
amount
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 of
people
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compare
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compared
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 to any other in the world.
Firstly
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, we have
China
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 with an
amount
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 of 1.415
billion
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.
Next
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 we have
India
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 with around 1.354
billion
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.
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, we have
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USA
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the USA
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 with an
amount
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 of 327
million
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.
China
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 and
India
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 both have over a
billion
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 humans residing in the country meanwhile
USA
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 barely has 300
million
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.
India
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 could
however
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 easily
outbeat
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out beat
outbreak
China
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, as
it's
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 residents have had an increase of 1.11% since 2017, unlike
China
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 and
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USA
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the USA
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 which have less than a one
percent
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per cent
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 increase. Despite
this
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,
India
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also
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 has the least
area
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 available. It has roughly around 455
people
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 per
square
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kilometer
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kilometre
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,
while
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 only having 2.973
million
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square
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kilometers
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kilometres
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.
China
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 has much more space available despite having the highest
amount
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 of residents currently, with only 151
people
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 per
square
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kilometers
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while
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 it has almost 10
million
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square
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kilometers
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kilometres
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.
Although
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USA
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the USA
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 cannot compare with the two above, it has the biggest urban
population
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 of 83%.
China
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 only has 58%,
while
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India
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 barely has
any
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32% of
people
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 in
it's
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 cities. To summarize the whole table,
China
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 has the highest
population
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 of 1.4
billion
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 but
it's
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its
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 land
area
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 is able to compensate for it.
India
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 has 1.3
billion
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,
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however
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however,
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 its
area
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 is dense and
it's
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its
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 land
area
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 is only 2.9
million
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, barely able to compensate for the
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amount
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number
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 of citizens residing in it. Despite
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USA
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the USA
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 only having 327
million
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, it has a huge land
area
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, allowing
people
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 to move freely without having to be tightly packed together, and most of
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USA's
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the USA's
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 citizens live inside the cities.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, billion, china, india, usa, amount, people, million, area, square with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age distribution
  • urbanization
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • healthcare accessibility
  • literacy rate
  • educational attainment
  • demographic trends
  • comparative analysis
  • socio-economic factors
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