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The table shows the percentage of people living in different types of dwellings in three parts of Australia in 2001 and 2006.

The table shows the percentage of people living in different types of dwellings in three parts of Australia in 2001 and 2006.
The table illustrates how the proportion of residents who lived in three types of dwellings changed in three regions of Australia in 2001 and 2006. In Tasmania, it is the
percentage
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 of
people
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 living in
houses
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 that stood out as it was significantly more than the figures for the other two types of dwellers,
while
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 it experienced a dip during the period.
On the contrary
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, more individuals lived in flats, growing from 7% in 2001 to 9% in 2006. The
percentage
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 of
people
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 living in duplex
houses
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 and other types
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 minimal and remained the same during the period, at 4% and 1% respectively.
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, in Victoria, the figure for dwellers in other kinds of dwellings did not change, keeping at 1%. At the same time, most
people
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(over 75%) lived in
houses
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 during the 5 years, despite a slight decrease. Compared with the above two areas,
however
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, there existed lots of differences in the Northern Territory. The
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 of citizens in others was higher than their counterparts in Victoria and Tasmania, at over 10%. There was a fall in the
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 of
people
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 in flat from 12% to 10%, different to the rising trend in the other two areas in Australia.
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,
it is clear that
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 most
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 in the three areas dwelled in
houses
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, all over 60%,
although
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 all declined steadily in the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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