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The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes.
#amount #tea #coffee #four #countries #tonnes
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The bar chart compares the amount of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 imported by four different countries in tonnes.
Overall
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, the figure shows different degrees between four huge countries. The
tea
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 was the most sold product in the UK. The
coffee
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 was the most sold serving in Germany. As the bar chart shows, in Canada
coffee
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 was bought more than
tea
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. 40
thousand
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 of
coffee
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 was bought from abroad and 20
thousand
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 of
tea
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 was bought from abroad. In the UK
this
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 figure shows 160
thousand
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 of
tea
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 was bought and 20
thousand
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 of
coffee
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 was bought from abroad. Turning to the USA around 110
thousand
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 of
tea
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 was bought and 40
thousand
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 of
coffee
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 was bought
in
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apply
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abroad.Regarding Germany, the number of
coffee
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 and
tea
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source
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sources
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 from abroad
almost
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is almost
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 the same. 45
thousand
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 of
coffee
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 was bought and 40
thousand
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 of
tea
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 was brought from abroad.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • import quantities
  • tonnes
  • overall trends
  • significantly more popular
  • notable similarities or differences
  • cultural preferences
  • climate
  • economic factors
  • highlight
  • describe
  • compare
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