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The chart below shows how frequently People in theUSA ate in fasr food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summaraise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently People in theUSA ate in fasr food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summaraise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Overall
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, there are 6 main societies of consumers for fast food restaurants in the USA.
However
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, the chart shows the highest level of consumption of burgers in faction "Once or twice a month" and "Once a
week
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".
On the other hand
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, the lowest level is shown in the "Every Day" group. Obviously, there is a constant amount of People who eat
such
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 food. The bar chart illustrates the dynamic of visiting street food points in the following period of time. There is a decreasing trend of demand in the "Every Day" and "Never" crowd between 2003 and 2013, it reached up to 2.5%.
However
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, the diagram presents equal demand in 2006 and 2013, it is an
averageof
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average of
 3%. Meanwhile, there is increasing growth of 2.7% in the other three organizations, except "Once or twice a month",
it
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which
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 is up to 2.5% compared with 2003. Consumption decreased to 5% in 2013
according to
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 the chart for the company "Several times a
week
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" and "Once a
week
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". No doubt, the most dynamic change is in "Once or twice a
week
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". Demand is decreasing to 25% in 2006 compared to 2003, but it is increasing to 33% in 2013.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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