You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager. - What the problem is - How you feel about the problem - What steps you want the manager to take

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Dear sir, My name is Mohammed

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and I am writing

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letter to bring your attention to the unpleasant experience I had in changing rooms at your sports centre.

Last

week, I had an opportunity to visit your sports centre and I would appreciate how well you have managed it.

However

, I

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to visit the changing rooms after my game and I am sorry to say but I was literally disappointed with the hygiene part, it was in

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too bad shape, managed poorly, with used napkins spread all over the floor and wash basins not cleaned. I felt devastated and left the place without using it. Hygiene is an important part

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at a place like

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centre and it should be given

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paramount importance,

hence

I request you to keep regular checks of changing rooms and assign the best staff to manage it.

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recommend you

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post some notices to remind users to use it properly and instruct your cleaning staff to work

deligently

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. I hope you will consider

hygiene

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part

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your top priority and

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a better experience when I visit it next time. Regards, Mohammed

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Sufyan

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task achievement

Your letter covers all the points required by the task, but consider breaking down complex sentences for more clarity.

coherence and cohesion

The paragraphs are well-organized, but make sure each paragraph conveys a single idea clearly to improve readability.

task achievement

Ensure consistency in tone; for instance, addressing the manager properly such as 'Dear Sir or Madam'.

tone

Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for formal correspondence.

organization

Clear structure with a greeting, body, and closing. This aids in readability and coherence.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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7 paragraphs

195 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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