You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager. - What the problem is - How you feel about the problem - What steps you want the manager to take

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Dear sir, My name is Mohammed

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and I am writing

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letter to bring your attention to the unpleasant experience I had in changing rooms at your sports centre.

Last

week, I had an opportunity to visit your sports centre and I would appreciate how well you have managed it.

However

, I

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to visit the changing rooms after my game and I am sorry to say but I was literally disappointed with the hygiene part, it was in

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too bad shape, managed poorly, with used napkins spread all over the floor and wash basins not cleaned. I felt devastated and left the place without using it. Hygiene is an important part

especially

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at a place like

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centre and it should be given

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paramount importance,

hence

I request you to keep regular checks of changing rooms and assign the best staff to manage it.

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recommend you

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post some notices to remind users to use it properly and instruct your cleaning staff to work

deligently

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diligently

. I hope you will consider

hygiene

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part

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your top priority and

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a better experience when I visit it next time. Regards, Mohammed

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Sufyan

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task achievement

Your letter covers all the points required by the task, but consider breaking down complex sentences for more clarity.

coherence and cohesion

The paragraphs are well-organized, but make sure each paragraph conveys a single idea clearly to improve readability.

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Ensure consistency in tone; for instance, addressing the manager properly such as 'Dear Sir or Madam'.

tone

Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for formal correspondence.

organization

Clear structure with a greeting, body, and closing. This aids in readability and coherence.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

195 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You are not satisfied with the changing rooms in a sports centre that you visit. Write a letter to the manager. - What the problem is - How you feel about the problem - What steps you want the manager to take

Some schools prefer to teach specialised subjects to students after the age of 15, while others suggest that all the subjects should be taught throughout school life. What are the benefits of these 2 approaches? Which one is better, in your opinion?

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Exposure to international media such as films, TV and megazines has significant impact on local culture. What do you think has been the impact? Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

The pictures illustrate the changes in Shipsmouth between 1995 and 2010.