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Internet access helps young people and workers achieve their study and work goals more easily than before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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internet
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 access helps young
people
 and workers achieve their
study
 and
work
goals
 more easily than before,
internet
 helps a lot of young
people
 to achieve their
goals
 at
study
 and
work
, is
this
 really true?
in
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this
 essay we will know how true is
this
.
overall
,
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internet
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make
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makes
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everything
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every thing
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everything
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more
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apply
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easier
comparions
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compared
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to
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by
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to
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 before,
internet
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 has more
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benefits
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benefit
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 than problems, one of these
benefit
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benefits
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 is
to
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it
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 helps young
people
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at
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study
 or
work
 and
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give
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 them a chance to
achieveing
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achieve
 their
goals
, but they should
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apply
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to
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know how to use websites, social media correctly,
for
example
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 if one of the students want to
study
 he can easily open youtube and write the course name he will found many of youtube videos explaining or teaching the course,
moreover
 there is
big
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 figure of
internet
 websites teaching different courses,
besides
, young
people
 can
also
 use
internet
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 to reach their
goals
 in
work
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for instance
people
 can
work
 online
while
 they
study
 at the same time, and they can learn more about the company they
work
 with, or they can learn about the thing they
does
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 in
work
, how to do it or whatever.
finally
, the proportion of
the
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young
people
 who
used
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use
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the internet
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internet
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 has
increaseing
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increasing
increased
 year after year, and as
i
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 said there is a lot of
benefit
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benefits
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 to
use
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using
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internet
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 specially to
study
 or
work
, absolutely i agree,
internet
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 helps a lot in different cases.
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