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Internet access helps young people and workers achieve their study and work goals more easily than before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#internet #access #people #workers #study #work #goals
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internet
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 access helps young
people
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 and workers achieve their
study
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 and
work
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goals
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 more easily than before,
internet
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 helps a lot of young
people
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 to achieve their
goals
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 at
study
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 and
work
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, is
this
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 really true?
in
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this
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 essay we will know how true is
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.
overall
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,
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internet
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make
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everything
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every thing
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everything
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more
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easier
comparions
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compared
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by
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 before,
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internet
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 has more
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benefit
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 than problems, one of these
benefit
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 is
to
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 helps young
people
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at
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study
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 or
work
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 and
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give
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 them a chance to
achieveing
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achieve
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, but they should
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apply
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to
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know how to use websites, social media correctly,
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example
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 if one of the students want to
study
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 he can easily open youtube and write the course name he will found many of youtube videos explaining or teaching the course,
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 there is
big
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 figure of
internet
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 websites teaching different courses,
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, young
people
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also
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internet
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 to reach their
goals
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 in
work
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for instance
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people
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 can
work
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 online
while
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 they
study
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 at the same time, and they can learn more about the company they
work
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 with, or they can learn about the thing they
does
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 in
work
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, how to do it or whatever.
finally
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, the proportion of
the
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apply
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young
people
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used
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use
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the internet
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internet
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 has
increaseing
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increasing
increased
 year after year, and as
i
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 said there is a lot of
benefit
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benefits
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 to
use
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internet
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 specially to
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 or
work
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, absolutely i agree,
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 helps a lot in different cases.
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Vocabulary
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Grammar
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Development
Develop your main points with more detailed examples and explanations. This will make your arguments more convincing and substantial.
Relevance
The essay clearly addresses the topic and provides some relevant examples about how the internet helps young people and workers achieve their goals.
Consistency
The writer shows a positive and clear stance on the issue, which is consistently supported throughout the essay.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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