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The floor plan shows changes made to a home during 6-month period

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The blueprint illustrates the pertaining to the changes of the house in 6 months. From an observational perspective, it can be seen that the home amenities have taken place with the kitchen, living room and meals.
Moreover
, the 2 bedrooms are untouched
while
 the bathroom has a little bit
changes
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. Beginning with the left part of the house, the wall that prevented the living room and the kitchen was demolished.
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 the top of the blueprint, the meals
was
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 replaced with the kitchen.
Furthermore
, the meals and the living room were standardised.
Additionally
, at the entrance, the
verendah
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verandah
 was flattened. Regarding the right half of the house, the
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 of the 2 bedrooms
were remained
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 untouched
whereas
 the robes in the 2 bedrooms were demolished.
In addition
, the bathroom
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 unchanged,
however
, most of the furniture
were
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 knocked down,
the
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 bath and vanity unit were converted into the shower cubicle and the toilet seat, respectively.
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 the left of the bath, the sink was extended over the wall.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the task by describing the changes in the floor plan. Ensure you provide a clearer and more comprehensive description of each change for a higher score in task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas better to improve coherence and cohesion. Use clear paragraphs for different sections of the house and ensure a logical flow of information.
task achievement
You correctly identified and described the key changes in the floor plan, such as the demolition of walls and the standardization of rooms.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a good structure with distinct sections for different parts of the house, which helps in understanding the changes.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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