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The bar chart below shows the percentages of three groups of Japanese children taking part in four kinds of activities in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the percentages of three groups of Japanese children taking part in four kinds of activities in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The featured graph compares the proportions of four
catagories
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categories
 of activities taken by Japanese
children
 in three different
age
 groups.
Overall
, with
age
 growing up, there are
less
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fewer
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children
tend
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who tend
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 to watch
televisions
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television
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 and
surfing
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surf
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internet
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the internet
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,
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while
 reading and riding become more popular as their ages
going
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go
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 up. It is clear from the chart that, the proportion
for
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of
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 kids who choose to watch TV in their spare time is higher than any other activities,
while
 the activity of playing computer games is the lowest one. There are 90%
children
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of children
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who
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apply
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aged 5 to 8
years
 old
taking
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take
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 part in
seeing
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watching
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televisions
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television
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,
while
 that only accounts for 80%
for
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of
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children
 between 9 to 16
years
 old.
By contrast
, playing computer games seems
being
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to be
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 less
attracti ve
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attractive
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 for young kids and adolescents. Only 60%
people
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of people
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 with 5 to 8
age
 would like to spend time on it, 55% when they
close
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are close
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 to 10
years
 old and 40% when they
getting
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are
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 12
years
 old.
Additionally
, there are around 60%
children
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of children
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 aged 5 to 8,
choosing
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choose
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 reading as their after-class
activities
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activity
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, and that figure increases to 70% for
children
 beyond 9
years
 old. Meanwhile, the percentage of
children
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who
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spend their time
on
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apply
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riding
the
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a
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 bike is 62% when they are 5 to 8
yearls
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years
 old, but that figure for
children
 whose
age
over
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is over
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 12 is 82%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, age, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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