The bar chart below shows the percentages of three groups of Japanese children taking part in four kinds of activities in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The featured graph compares the proportions of four spend their time
catagories
of activities taken by Japanese Correct your spelling
categories
children
in three different Use synonyms
age
groups.
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Overall
, with Linking Words
age
growing up, there are Use synonyms
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
children
Use synonyms
tend
to watch Correct pronoun usage
who tend
televisions
and Fix the agreement mistake
television
surfing
Replace the word
surf
internet
Correct article usage
the internet
,
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apply
while
reading and riding become more popular as their ages Linking Words
going
up.
It is clear from the chart that, the proportion Wrong verb form
go
for
kids who choose to watch TV in their spare time is higher than any other activities, Change preposition
of
while
the activity of playing computer games is the lowest one. There are 90% Linking Words
Use synonyms
children
Change preposition
of children
who
aged 5 to 8 Correct pronoun usage
apply
years
old Use synonyms
taking
part in Wrong verb form
take
seeing
Verb problem
watching
televisions
, Fix the agreement mistake
television
while
that only accounts for 80% Linking Words
for
Change preposition
of
children
between 9 to 16 Use synonyms
years
old. Use synonyms
By contrast
, playing computer games seems Linking Words
being
less Change the verb form
to be
attracti ve
for young kids and adolescents. Only 60% Correct your spelling
attractive
people
with 5 to 8 Change preposition
of people
age
would like to spend time on it, 55% when they Use synonyms
close
to 10 Add a missing verb
are close
years
old and 40% when they Use synonyms
getting
12 Verb problem
are
years
old.
Use synonyms
Additionally
, there are around 60% Linking Words
Use synonyms
children
aged 5 to 8, Change preposition
of children
choosing
reading as their after-class Wrong verb form
choose
activities
, and that figure increases to 70% for Fix the agreement mistake
activity
children
beyond 9 Use synonyms
years
old. Meanwhile, the percentage of Use synonyms
children
Use synonyms
Correct pronoun usage
who
on
riding Change preposition
apply
the
bike is 62% when they are 5 to 8 Correct article usage
a
yearls
old, but that figure for Correct your spelling
years
children
whose Use synonyms
age
Use synonyms
over
12 is 82%.Add a missing verb
is over
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