Task 1 - the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1 - the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives information about the
number
of closed
shops
and new
shops
which opened in one country over the
period
(2011 to 2018). As
it
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apply
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can be seen, the
number
of closing and opening
shops
has been fluctuated over the given
period
,
as well as
the
quantity
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number
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of
shops
that opened and closed dropped dramatically in the middle of
period
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the period
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. To commence with the
number
of market closures, it illustrates that it reached
the
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a
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peak of 8500 in
first
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the first
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year of the given
period
. Later on, the quantity
is
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apply
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a
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apply
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gradual
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gradually
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fluctuate
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fluctuated
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before it remained stable from 2015 to 2017. From 2017 to 2018, the
closed
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number of closed
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shops
decreased slightly
at
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to
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3000.
On the other hand
, new
shops
started to open with more than 6000
shops
in 2011. Opened
shops
has
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have
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same
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the same
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trend
of
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as
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the closed
shops
which
were
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apply
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fluctuated. In 2015, the
number
of operated
shops
fell suddenly to less than 1000. From 2016,
opened
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the opened
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shops
increased considerably before
leveled
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levelling
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off approximately at 5000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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