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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the development of Westley in two hundred years.
Overall
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, the living standard in
this
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area
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 has improved since more facilities
has
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 been built since 1815. In 1815, Wesley was a residential
area
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 with not much of facilities. The majority of
south
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the south
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 side was felids and houses
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 the woods, a church, Lord Wesley’s house and more housing to the north. Regarding
to
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the transportation system, there was only one major road from Tinton village,
half way
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 through Westley, and ended in the fields.
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, if people wanted to visit Wesley from London, the only way was going through the Twine Toll Bridge by car. Nowadays, Wesley has changed a lot and
becomes
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 more developed.
The most
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 of the buildings have changed but the town hall and market square are still the same. There are more housings built. The woods have been cut down and replaced by a new housing estate.
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, a business and residential
area
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 has been built next to the Town Hall. The Lord Westley’s House has
replaced
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 by The Red Lion and Lenton Hotel. The Coach Inn has been demolished and turned into a sports
center
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 and museum. A West Gate shopping
center
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 is opened
at
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where the church used to be. In terms of transportation, a railroad system has been built and the road has been extended to the southernmost of the city where currently is a new shopping, business and residential
area
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. The city has become more
convenience
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 with only one drawback of lacking greens since all the fields and woods
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 removed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • public facilities
  • road networks
  • railways
  • connectivity
  • housing expansion
  • commercial facilities
  • development
  • modifications
  • shopping centers
  • recreational areas
  • key changes
  • urbanization
  • historical comparison
  • municipal design
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