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The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

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The given graph chart illustrates the proportion of precipitation in millions of metric
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 in each sector group in the United Kingdom between 1990 and 2007. The general overview here is that, over the period, there was a significant decrease in the domestic sector group, which had a few metric
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 other industries had a high ratio.
According to
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 the data, in 1991, the total number of other industries began at 2.1 metric
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, from 1993 to 2007, the proportion of other industries decreased significantly from 2.00 to 1.3 metric
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although
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, from 1991 to 2007, the rate of electricity, gas, and water supply decreased essentially from 3.3 to 0.4 metric
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, in 1991, the domestic ratio began at 0.6 metric
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; rather, from 1995 to 2007, it decreased dramatically from 0.5 to 0.3 metric
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, from 1991 to 2007, the rainfall of transport and communication increased from 0.7 to 0.9 metric
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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