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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides data on
number
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 of people living in poverty from each household type in Australia in 1999. The information was categorized into six categories
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 family type.
Overall
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, the highest
percentage
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 of people who lived in poverty belongs to sole parents,
whereas
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 the biggest account of residents
have
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 couples with
children
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. Meanwhile, aged couples have the lowest
percentage
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 compared to other groups.
According to
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 the table, sole parents and singles with no
children
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 scored the biggest
percentage
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 at 19% and 21% respectively.
However
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, as a group with
highest
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 number of people, it dominated above
others
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 couples with
children
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 at 12%(933,000).
On the other hand
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, a relatively low
percentage
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 was among 3 family types (single aged person, aged couple, and couple with no
children
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) from 4% to 7% minor.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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