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The amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries

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What has been depicted in the bar chart is how much
tea
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 and
coffee
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 is imported by four different nations.
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, the amount of
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 and
coffee
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 imported by the United States ranked
first,
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while
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 the imports of Canada and the United Kingdom stood at the
last
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 in the amount allocated. The largest proportion of the imported
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 and
coffee
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 was allocated to the UK,
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 160,000
tonnes
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, which is closely followed by the USA (just below 120,000
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).
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, the amount of
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tea
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 imports by Germany and Canada declined, the former was four times less than the
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 country in the chart, and the latter was 20,000
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. As regards the figure for
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 imported,
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 Germany witnessed the highest purchases, the United Kingdom ranked
last
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, importing about half as much as the other countries.
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, the other mentioned countries experienced the same exact number, which was 4,000
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.
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task achievement
Ensure all relevant data from the chart is included, and specify the differentiation between tea and coffee imports more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking devices to enhance the flow between points, and ensure each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the data.
task achievement
The essay has a clear introduction and description of the overall trends in the data.
coherence cohesion
There is a logical structure with paragraphs dedicated to specific parts of the data.

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