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Nowadays, more and more foreign students are going to English-speaking. countries to learn the international language English. It is undoubtedly true that studying English in an English speaking country is the best way, but it is not the only way to learn it. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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 learning
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 through living in
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-speaking countries is
one
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 of the best ways to learn
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language
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,
but
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it's not the only
way
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. There are numerous ways that a learner can achieve their goal
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 learning the
language
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 by using them.
For instance
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, watching movies and videos, reading
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intructor
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instructor
 books, searching for educational videos on the internet
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etc... There are a group of people who believe that they can
educate
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English
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 through watching movies and series. In
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way
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 They focus on the script of the movie and highlight the important words, phrases or idioms. Despite the fact that
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 method is really useful for memorizing the idioms and repeating after the actor or actress,
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 is not good for those who are
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elementry
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elementary
levels
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. Because they need to achieve some basis of the
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 use
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way
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. Reading the
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instructor
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 books is
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one
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 of the best options for educators.
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, for the basic
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, a teacher who can teach and check the
homeworks
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homework
 is needed. On higher
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 like
upper-inetrmediate
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upper-intermediate
 or advanced, educators are able to learn from books without an instructor but
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 it's crucial to have someone in order to check the education progress once in a
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. Ultimately, the third option might be the best
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 out of these 3 options. By watching
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 learning videos or even listening to
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related podcasts, the pupil is able to learn without having someone as a teacher. The person who is speaking on that program is usually an actual teacher who likes to broadcast their method of teaching for those who
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 have access to the classroom or other routines. These programs have different
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 and they are like a series that the person can follow and achieve their goal without attending
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expensive classes.
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, a person can learn the mentioned
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from
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 different ways. It depends on various reasons
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 as their financial status, their
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accessibility
 to the different sources, and their desire to choose
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 of the sources as well.
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, it has been emphasised that using all methods together at the same time is the ideal
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As a result
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, it won't be boring for the student and they can bring the knowledge to use with a stronger basis.

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organization
Try to organize your essay with a clear and systematic structure. Each paragraph should reflect one main idea, and transitions between paragraphs should be smooth. Your current essay has some good points but they are scattered.
examples
Your essay would benefit from more specific and detailed examples to support your points. For example, when discussing using movies to learn English, you could elaborate on a specific technique or a personal experience to make your argument stronger.
language use
There are some minor grammatical errors and typos (e.g., "upper-inetrmediate" should be "upper-intermediate", "elementry levels" should be "elementary levels"). While they do not significantly impede understanding, correcting them can enhance clarity and professionalism. Consider proofreading your work or using grammar-check tools.
conclusion
The conclusion summarizes the essay well, but could be more impactful. Try to restate the main points in a more compelling way, and perhaps provide a final thought or call to action.
balance
You have presented a balanced view on the topic, recognizing the advantages of learning English in an English-speaking country while acknowledging other viable methods.
introduction
Your introduction is clear and sets the stage for the essay effectively.
range
The use of different methods and examples demonstrates a range of options and shows you have thought about multiple ways to approach language learning.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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