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The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.

The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.
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The maps illustrate
about
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the development in Pentland which is
kind
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a kind
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 of coastal zone between 1950
to
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and
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 2007.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are many establishment buildings. Looking in more detail, in 1950, from
southern
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the southern
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 of the picture, there was a road that connected with the
sea
. At the beginning of the road,
both
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right
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the right
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 and left
side
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, there was a space for cultivating some grasses.
Next,
walking forward, the car park was situated to the east, meanwhile the opposite
were
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location
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the location
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 for some industrial buildings with the
sea
which
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was located in the middle. Meanwhile, in 2007, from
southern
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the southern
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 of the map, there
is
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was
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 a road to link to the
sea
. In the right corner, the grassland is diminished and replaced by a lot of houses which are erected for people
and
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followed by the existence of
the
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shops. In the opposite of
these housing area
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this housing area
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, the cinema is built near
with
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another shop area. The previous car park is relocated to western and equipped by multi-storey feature.
Industrial
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 area is replaced by entertainment buildings
such
 as a park and swimming pool.
In
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 the opposite, several new apartments are established and the
sea
 is filled by yacht marine zone
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • coastal area
  • transformation
  • landscape
  • land use
  • infrastructure
  • environmental modifications
  • residential development
  • urban living spaces
  • commercial areas
  • recreational facilities
  • economic landscape
  • green spaces
  • natural habitats
  • urban expansion
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