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Some people think that planning for future is a waste of time.They believe it is more important to focus on the present.Do you agree or disagree?

In
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 is a waste of
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.
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 is the very method that plenty of
people
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 have already ignored.There are two principal reasons for
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.
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 there are valid arguments to the contrary,in
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 facts l will agree that it is
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crucial to pay attention to the present planning.Humans have decided to
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 for next
time
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 by virtue
planning
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of planning
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consume
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 most of
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 free
time
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people
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for
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this
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 idea
an
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entrepreneurs,
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they
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 do something
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with
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rapidly without planning.Nowadays,
people
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 have just done faster without
time
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 go ahead,as result of which they are
developped
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developed
 day-by-day.
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,
people
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 need not
consentrate
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concentrate
 on the current that they would prefer to planning
someting
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something
 to do before.
Goverments
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Governments
 should
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plan
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 rules so
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much
 so that they can control
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the country.If we were planning for the
time
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 ahead on a daily basis and now we have not
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succeeded
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 bottomless ambitions.
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the very
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 manner that
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 suddenly ,
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,we
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 not anticipate
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 mishap and we
are
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stayed by
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the emotional
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 wreck. On
other
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 hand,
people
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 cannot
planning
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plan
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everthing
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everything
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due to
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 they can confront
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problems more and more.If it were not for planning ,we would not have achieved success and administrations would not have curbed populations or rules,
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businessman
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businessmen
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 or
businesswoman
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businesswomen
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 cannot trade with other sellers and so on.
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,
people
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 are developed
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 to the point that they have
been
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planned
everwork
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ever work
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 before they commence to do something.
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,
people
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 planning business techniques and the launch
a
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 new products for customers.They do not care
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time-consuming
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how time-consuming
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who
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they
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 are they produce high-quality commodities.
This
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 is the very style that school principals utilize for themselves.School schedules planning
ever
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every
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 day,if it were not for
timetable
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timetables
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,they would not have
controlled
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 and they would have
get
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got
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 mixed planning its actions speak louder than words. In a nutshell,we are careful planning allows
people
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 to derive maximum benefits from their approach for look-forward.Without planning ,we cannot do well for
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ourselves
.We can
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 our daily routines,we keep our eyes on the ball.

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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph clearly addresses a specific point and follow it with relevant examples. This can be done by using topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph.
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Enhance the clarity and comprehensibility of your ideas. Avoid using overly complex sentence structures that may confuse the reader. Instead, aim for clear and concise sentences.
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Use more relevant and specific examples to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
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The essay provides a complete response to the prompt by discussing both the importance of focusing on the present and the drawbacks of over-planning for the future.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and help to frame the essay.
Your opinion

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