The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities
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Given are two figures providing a comparison of the before and after building of some tourist facilities and amenities on an
island
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Overall
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, one particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that on the former map, there were not any facilities, but in the latter numerous amenities have provided ease and comfort for the people who have
traveled
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travelled
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to the area.
According to
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what is shown, the pier having been built is the first and foremost change in the second map because it has provided the easiest access for entrance to the
island
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Moreover
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, travellers easily move from the pier to the
receprion
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reception
and restaurant through
vehicle
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the vehicle
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track and
also
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the footpath
have offered
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offers
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access to everywhere on the
island
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Additionally
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, it is interesting to note that a large number of cottages have been designed in the
center
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centre
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and the west of the
island
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and
also
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the reception is near the pier. A huge restaurant has been constructed in the north.
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, it is noteworthy to note that the specific zone has been designed for passengers in order to swim.
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, on the first map passengers
face
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faced
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a lot of problems
to settle
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settling
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because there were not any facilities to
accommodate
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accommodate them
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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