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Band 5.5

The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.
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The
line
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 graph shows 3
type
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types
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 of crime that happened in Newport
town
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Town
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 from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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, the
line
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 gives three
crime
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crimes
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that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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namely
burglary
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, car theft and robbery , it is
clearly
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clear
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 that the highest
point
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 of
burglary
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 was in 2004
while
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 the lowest number of
robbery
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robberies
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made
Verb problem
was
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up
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apply
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in 2008. Now , Turing
to
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apply
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details the
burglary
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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made u reach the peak in 2004 after that the
line
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's
burglary
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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declined to reach
to
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apply
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the lower
point
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 in 2008
then
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 goes to wave to reach
in
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apply
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the end
line
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 to under 1500.
While
Linking Words
 lie
line
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's car theft in the
begin
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beginning
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remain
Wrong verb form
remained
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 steady until 2005
then
Linking Words
 dropped
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to the
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the
Correct article usage
a
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 lower
point
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 to
accounted
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account
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by
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for
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 above 2000 sequently the red
line
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was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 between 2000 and around
2500point
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2500 points
 to
arrived
Wrong verb form
arrive
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in
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at
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 the
last
Linking Words
point
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to
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at
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 approximately number 2500 .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, burglary, point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recorded
  • trends
  • criminal activity
  • categories
  • theft
  • assault
  • vandalism
  • graph
  • x-axis
  • y-axis
  • number of crimes
  • visual representation
  • changes
  • crime rates
  • fluctuating pattern
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