The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The line graph gives
the
information on four different countries of residence of abroad Correct article usage
apply
students
in Australia
Overall
, as can be clearly seen from the line graph, the countries are divided into 4 countries, including Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia
, and Singapore. The most traveled
country is Indonesia, Change the spelling
travelled
the
least Correct word choice
and the
traveled
place is Change the spelling
travelled
Malaysia
. Firstly
in 1982, the number
of televangelists who traveled to Malaysia
was approximately 8 thousand
, in 1984, that increase
and it was approximately 9 Replace the word
increased
thousand
, and then
it remained the same until 1990 later in 2000, 17 thousand
student
traveled to Change to a plural noun
students
Malaysia
. In 1982, about 2 thousand
people went to Hong Kong this
number
continued until 1986 In 1988, the go up
stopped, it was approximately 7 Add a hyphen
go-up
thousand
,in 1990, growth started again, and the number
of TV celebrities going to Hong Kong reached 10 thousand
. In 1996, drop up
to 19 Verb problem
it dropped
thousand
students
however
, on the other hand
, it gradually decreased in 2000. In 1982, 3 thousand
students
traveled to Indonesia. By 1998, the number
of students
increased to about 26,000. In 1999, the decrease it
was approximately 21 Correct pronoun usage
apply
thousand
compared to,in 2000, the shoot up again and it was approximately 23 thousand
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