The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graph gives
the
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information on four different countries of residence of abroad
students
in Australia
Overall
, as can be clearly seen from the line graph, the countries are divided into 4 countries, including Indonesia, Hong Kong,
Malaysia
, and Singapore. The most
traveled
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travelled
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country is Indonesia,
the
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and the
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least
traveled
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travelled
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place is
Malaysia
.
Firstly
in 1982, the
number
of televangelists who traveled to
Malaysia
was approximately 8
thousand
, in 1984, that
increase
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and it was approximately 9
thousand
, and
then
it remained the same until 1990 later in 2000, 17
thousand
student
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students
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traveled to
Malaysia
. In 1982, about 2
thousand
people went to Hong Kong
this
number
continued until 1986 In 1988, the
go up
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stopped, it was approximately 7
thousand
,in 1990, growth started again, and the
number
of TV celebrities going to Hong Kong reached 10
thousand
. In 1996,
drop up
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it dropped
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to 19
thousand
students
however
,
on the other hand
, it gradually decreased in 2000. In 1982, 3
thousand
students
traveled to Indonesia. By 1998, the
number
of
students
increased to about 26,000. In 1999, the decrease
it
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was approximately 21
thousand
compared to,in 2000, the shoot up again and it was approximately 23
thousand
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, malaysia, number, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas students
  • country of residence
  • Australia
  • number of students
  • trends
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant increase
  • decrease
  • stable trends
  • period
  • comparisons
  • highlight
  • potential reasons
  • factors
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