The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
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The chart
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the ratio of smokers per 1000 people divided by gender in Someland between 1960 to 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the percentage of smoker men fell throughout the years significantly, meanwhile, the smoker women rose slowly.
In addition
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,
at the end
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of the period, the rate of smoking
males
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among males
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and females
are
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nearly similar.
To begin
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with, in 1960, almost 60% of adult males at that time were smoking cigarettes,
then
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the number of smoking men started to decline gradually, after that it faced a rapid drop from 1990 to 2000. In terms of women, the number of adult females who were smoking in the 60s where low about 10% but , it started to rise rapidly and reached 30% in 1975,
then
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the chart was almost steady for 15 years , in the end, the chart decreased and arrived at fifth by the year of 2000.
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