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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 pie charts illustrate the aftermath of surveys among the guests. Meanwhile, it is a comparison between the former and the later
year
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years
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 as
museum
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museums
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has
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have
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 revolutionized.
Overall
, before
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people
 who
dissatisfied
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were dissatisfied
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has
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had
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 a lion's share.
Although
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are
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is
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 constant.
however
, After changes more
people
 are very satisfied. Looking
on
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 the pie charts, it is crystal clear that previously the majority of
people
dissatisfied
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were dissatisfied
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 40% and later the ratio declined to 15%.
Wherease
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Whereas
, very satisfied surged to double 35% as in the past it stood
15
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at 15
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% and no response from
tourist
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tourists
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was recorded
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has recorded
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at a
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a
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the
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 same percentile
5
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of 5
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% in both years. Moving towards the rest of the information,
satisfied
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satisfaction
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 was 30% before
transform
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transforming
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 the museum as it climbed
dramtically
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dramatically
 to 10%.
People
 who
was
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were
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 very dissatisfied
10
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were 10
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% and after some development it
fall
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fell
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 to half.
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