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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the proportion of
workforce
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the workforce
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 who have a job and their average income,
along with
 the percentage of
people
 with an undergraduate degree in eight counties in Europe in 2015.
Overall
, we can see that there is a positive relationship between the ratio of college graduates, and average wage. The more educated
people
 a country
have
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, the more job opportunities and
salary their
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salaries
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people
 have. First of all, these eight countries have similar employment rates which between 50.8%, the lowest, in Greece and 72.7%, the highest, in Norway.
However
,
people
 there had different
level
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levels
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 of education and average income levels. Norway (43.2%), the United Kingdom (41.6%) and Luxembourg (41.1%) have the largest proportion of
high
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highly
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 educated
people
 in their countries. Four out of ten
people
 there owned a
bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degree. Since
workforce
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the workforce
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 there
were
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was
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 more educated, the employment rates and their average salary were
also
 the highest. Portugal (22.9%), Bulgaria (27.5%) and Greece (29.1%) have the
least
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lowest
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 ratio of workers with higher education.
As a result
, their average incomes were the lowest.
Bulgarian's
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Bulgarian
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 wages were less than 10% of
Norway
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Norway's
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 workers.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rate
  • education level
  • percentage
  • statistics
  • comparison
  • correlation
  • trend
  • pattern
  • outlier
  • figure
  • summarize
  • highlight
  • report
  • significant
  • relevant
  • overview
  • analyse
  • data
  • implication
  • demographic
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