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Southlands main exports in 2000 and 2024, and future projections for 2035.

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Southlands main exports in the past, which were the 2000s, are in the present, which is 2024, and in the future, which will be 2035.
Overall
, the bar chart is separated into 3 years, which are
also
 divided into 3 aspects, which we should consider. It is important to note that meat
products
 weren’t that popular in the past, present, or future.
However
, dairy
products
 and international tourism are fighting for the podium as Southlands’ main exports. In the 2000s, international tourism was at 8.1
billion
-
pounds
 sterling;
however
, by 2024, it had risen by 9
billion
pounds
, making the
revenue
 rise by 1
billion
, which is a great sum considering that only 24 years have passed since the 2000s. By 2035, it will be obvious that international tourism has won the rivalry, with
revenue
 accumulating to $10
billion
. Dairy and meat
products
 didn’t start great, as they both had 6-7
billion
 in the 2000s. Meat
products
 were not that popular among the Southlanders, and in the following years, it would be obvious, because in 2024 the
revenue
 decreased to 500 million
pounds
, and it will keep decreasing to 5
billion
-
pounds
 sterling. Dairy
products
 started nicely, with an accumulated
revenue
 of $7
billion
, and it rose to $10
billion
 by 2024.
However
, it will drop by 500 million in 2035.
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