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The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about UK independent films. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides data on indie movies by genre that were released in
UK
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the UK
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 and Ireland in 2012. The films were divided into three sections: number of
releases
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,
percentage
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 of all
releases
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, and
percentage
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 of income from ticket sales.
Overall
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,
genres
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 like documentary and drama took the lead as the ones with the biggest number of
releases
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. Meanwhile, the highest
percentage
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 of demand had comedy and horror after.
To begin
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 with, in 2012, both documentary and drama released the most films at number 35.
Folowing
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Following
this
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, horror and comedy scored relatively lower at an average of 18,
while
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others
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other
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genres
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 released under the mark of 10.
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,
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of all
releases
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 was
according to
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 the first section.
On the other hand
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,
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of income from
tickets
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ticket
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 sales showcased the high demand for them. Generally speaking,
genres
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 like comedy attained the top
percentage
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 among others at 45.4,
horror
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and horror
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 at 20,2
after
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apply
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.
Moreover
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, the rest of
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genres
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the genres
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 in ticket sales were below 10.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words releases, percentage, genres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independent films
  • box office revenue
  • film production
  • genre diversity
  • domestic market
  • international market
  • critical reception
  • trend analysis
  • market share
  • year-over-year comparison
  • growth trajectory
  • commercial success
  • film distribution
  • accolades and awards
  • viewer reception
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