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The bar charts give data on noise levels by day and by night in rural and urban areas in Europe

The bar charts give data on noise levels by day and by night in rural and urban areas in Europe
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The bar charts illustrate the number of
people
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 who were affected by noise in rural and urban
areas
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 in Europe. Units are measured in millions.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the majority of the cause for both of the 2
areas
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 was in Traffic,
otherwise
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,
industry
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the industry
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 became the smallest compared to the others.
To begin
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 with, Traffic in cities accounted for 64
million
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 in the
day
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 and 48 at
night
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.
Similarly
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 to the cities, in rural
areas
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, the Traffic has the most problems for the
people
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whereas
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 the
day
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 and at
night
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 were 34 and 24
million
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, respectively. Following that, there was no significant difference between Trains in rural and city
areas
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 with only 4
million
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 in the combination between the
day
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 and the
night
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. Looking at the figures, Aircraft became the third position compared to others. In a
day
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, there was a significant difference between cities and rural
areas
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 that around 2 times.
However
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, at
night
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, there was a similar number of Aircraft which accounted for 1
million
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 for both of their
areas
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. The smallest number was Industry in both
areas
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. Only 1
million
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 in a
day
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 and 0.25 at
night
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people
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 were affected by the noise of Industry in city
areas
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.
Otherwise
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, none of the
people
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 were affected in rural
areas
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "otherwise".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, areas, million, day, night with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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