You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the total expenses by foreign tourists in the United Kingdom between 1980 and 2010
while
the bar graph gives the
information on the purpose of their visit in 1980 and 2010.
Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, the major reason that people coming
to the Wrong verb form
came
UK
was for vacation and we can see that there was an inclination on the money that travellers spent throughout the thirty-year period
.
The reasons for global visitors travelling to the UK
hadn't changed much throughout the period
. The majority of people went
to the Wrong verb form
go
UK
for three major reasons, which are for holiday, business and friends and family reunion
. These three categories accounted for more than 80%. Fix the agreement mistake
reunions
While
about 40% of tourists visited the UK
for vacation in both period
, the portion of business travellers had decreased Fix the agreement mistake
periods
about
2% by 2010, Change preposition
by about
whereas
figures for visiting friends and relatives had increased by 10%.
In terms of money spent in the UK
, the numbers fluctuated between 7,000 millions
pounds and 12,000 Change to singular
million
millions
during the Change to singular
million
period
. In 1980, the total expenditure by overseas visitors was 7,800 millions
before a sudden drop which Change to singular
million
reach
the base Wrong verb form
reached
at
7,000 million in 1982. Change preposition
of
Then
, the figures fluctuated until 1993 where
the numbers increased dramatically and reached the climate Correct word choice
when
at
$12,000 in 1995. After that, the numbers went down and recovered back to $11,000 Change preposition
of
at the end
of the period
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